The Viking’s Captive

Thorvald Longsword can't believe all he has to do is kidnap the daughter of his jarl's enemy to get his land back. Easy. But when he finally snatches the princess up and tosses her over his shoulder, the beautiful spitfire makes him question his determination to get his land back at any cost.

Alodie gladly agrees to impersonate the princess so the bloodthirsty Northmen will take her instead. While Alodie might be ready to die for her people, she wasn't prepared for how her pulse races for the maddeningly noble captor whom she'd just as soon hate.

But what happens when Thorvald finds out she's not who she says she is? 

Contains mature themes.

©2019 Ingrid Hahn (P)2022 Tantor

Too much inner monologue, too little actual dialogue

90% inner monologue to 10% actual monologue is not a good ratio. Makes the interactions between characters disjointed and hard to follow. If the listener has to work this hard, there is a problem.