Criminal

A Sci Fi Alien Romance

By: Ava Castle

Narrated by: Virtual Voice

He stole my freedom. I stole his heart. But in this game of power and obsession, only one of us can truly win…

Adriana
I was just another ghost in the cyber-world, a hacker-for-hire playing a dangerous game. Stealing from Rhydor Valtheris, the most feared crime lord in the galaxy, should have been my biggest payday—until I got caught. Now, I’m shackled on his ship, at his mercy, and he doesn’t plan to let me go. He wants to break me, own me, make me submit. But I’m no man’s plaything. I’ll fight him, resist him, even if every dark promise in his amber eyes makes my body betray me.
Rhydor
She thought she could steal from me and vanish. Foolish girl. I’ve ruled the underworld for too long to let a little hacker outplay me. Now, she’s mine, locked in my domain, and I will teach her exactly what that means. She can resist all she wants—scratch, bite, curse my name—but her body already knows the truth. She belongs to me. And soon, her heart will too.

🔥 Enemies to Lovers
🖤 Captive Romance
💀 Mafia & Crime Boss
🚀 Forced Proximity
🥀 Dark Romance
🔒 Power Struggles
🖤 Dubious Consent
👑 Antihero Alpha
💋 Obsession & Possession
🛑 No Safe Word

The lack of commas is a huge detriment

It'd be a great story if it was written in full sentences with commas, instead of. Only getting. Few words. In short time.

Ex: "Got 'em. I said. My voice tight. Tweaking the signal. Sending a fake ping. My hands steady despite the chaos."

Then when it comes to certain types of scenes or interactions - intimate scenes are the worst for it - it's just the same thing repeated over and over: His thigh between mine. Spreading them wide. His heat warming my skin. His eyes full of desire.

Then, not much later, the same exact words are repeated. And again... ad nauseam.

Honestly, the AI voice is more the highlight, and that's unfortunate. It really, really, would be good if someone did some proper editing and made revisions. The book would certainly grab more attention. At current, the ideas are there, but the execution is... poor.