My Entanglement this Christmas

By: Uniquely Lashay

Narrated by: Virtual Voice

Amber Joy is one of the baddest BBW’s, who has a personality like no other. She has secrets in her life just like most of us in this world. The only problem with secrets is they always seem to catch up with you in due time. With the Holidays right around the corner will Amber let go of her past and enjoy Christmas by having an entanglement with her future.

Amber and Riley Rivers have been best friends since she could remember. Riley losing his mother at an early age turned him into a savage. And dealing with an abusive and alcoholic father took its toll on him. Nobody accepts Riley like Amber does which leaves him in between a rock and a hard place with finding true love. The only problem these two have is announcing their entanglement. Which is the perfect gift this Christmas.

Ok...Doesn't seem particularly Christmas focused and lacks cohesiveness at the end

The story didn't seem particularly associated with the holidays. Additionally, there were several storylines that were introduced that never were completed out. Not sure if that was intentional for sequels but the story didn't end in a manner to imply a continuation. The random murder and vow to avenge seem pointless. The paternity at the end could have also been tied off better with how that coming to light made the father feel about the girl and whether he cared about get obsession/infatuation. It just felt maybe rushed, like an afterthought in parts towards the end. It was like a story someone almost completed and put down then realized they needed to turn in for a grade and slapped a few sentences on to meet a deadline. Would love this revisited with the removal of the unnecessary story arcs or with them being tied in. As well, Christmas should not be an afterthought if it's in the title. More should be associated with Christmas than a random party once or twice.